A few people debate that technological inventions like cell phones are making people socially less interactive. To what extend do you agree with this statement

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systematic investigation to establish facts
researches
researchers
resources
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s tht
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show
have shown
a
pointing out something
that
as a result
of rapid increase in the field of technology and the innovations of electronic gadgets makes people less interactive with others. I agre
es wit
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agree
am agreeing
have agreed
h
this
statement and in the following paragraphs I intend to put forth my arguments to support my views.
Firstly
, the inventions of elct
ronic equ
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
electronics
ipments plays a tremendous change in the human life
style, wh
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
ereas he can access everything in his fingertip. In the past people often visit parks, restaurants, cinemas to spend his leisure
time
, but now he can watch movies through his mobile phone or laptops.
Also
he can
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Also, he
order foods through online applications like zoma
to, ub
er
eat
at a higher position than
over
ever
s, swig
gy fro
move in a curve or arc, usually with the intent of hitting
swing
m his favo
rite res
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
taurant itself.
This
makes people more idler because they get everything in front of him without spending
time
but all
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time, but
they need nothing but money! The afte
r effect is
any result that follows its cause after an interval
aftereffect
that people never met each other and they do not even know who is living in his neig
hbour hou
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neighbour's
se and the helping mentality between the human becomes degraded. Man beco
me phy
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becomes
sically and mentally unstable by using these gadgets,
for exam
ple previously chi
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example, previously
ldren goes
to
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go
play
ground to
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the playground
playground
a playground
play cricket, foot
ball, ba
any of various games played with a ball (round or oval) in which two teams try to kick or carry or propel the ball into each other's goal
football
sk
et ball and
a game played on a court by two opposing teams of 5 players; points are scored by throwing the ball through an elevated horizontal hoop
basketball
it was a great exer
sice for
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
them so that they can survive from many dise
ases but tod
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diseases, but
a
y chi
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today's
ldren and youth stuck at home with their mobile phones and play online games like pubg
y, fa
short and plump
pudgy
rm
ille whi
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a family
family
ch never gives any physical exercise to them. They are
getting add
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get
icted to these days day by day,
also
they may affe
cted to
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affect
severe head
ache.
something or someone that causes anxiety; a source of unhappiness
headache
On the other hand
it can
also
be argued about the positive side of using these kind of electronic gadgets. It is irrefutable that there are some advantages on t
he
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of
se new inventions like we can save our
time
in public places like rail
way station by
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railway stations
a railway station
booking the railway tickets in advance through online.
Also
some you
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Also, some
ngsters started “helping organisation” and they have connection all over the state by creating groups in social medi
as lik
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
e wats
app, fa
ce
book, te
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Facebook
legram and their main aim is to donate blood, food, dresses to whom it is needed. In the year 2017 Kerala was affected with
flo
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by
o
d whi
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the flood
ch was an unexpected disaster for all the Keralites. During flood many people loos
e the
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
ir house, dresses, at that
time
they get help from every part of the world and youngsters plays a vital role by using their mobile phones. They create groups and add many people in that,
also
they post their requirements so that they got help when
ever nee
at whatever time
whenever
ded. In conclusion the invention of mobile phones proved many advantages to the soci
ety
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society, however
however
it gives social gap between people and given rise to the feeling of isolation among people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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