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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Traffic has become a serious issue in metro cities due to a large number of vehicles on road, migrants migrating, for better opportunities
such
 as job and education.
Also
, due poor conditions of road having potholes and narrow roads. Some people opine that the government should spend some amount of revenue on railways and constructing subways to eliminate traffic congestion while, others say that building wider roads is best solution to reduce the traffic. I personally agree, with the former view as it will not only reduce Air pollution but
also
 traffic. On the one side, developing railway line and metros is the best way to improve public
infrustructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
infrastructures
 and encourage people to
use them which,
Suggestion
use them, which
 will reduce the motorcars on the roads.
Migrant
Suggestion
A migrant
 from rural areas travel to urban areas for better quality of life and to earn for their living by using the government facilities it will help them reduce the cost of travelling.
For example
,
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,
in the united
nation people
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nation, people
 prefer to travel
buy
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by
 trains and subways because of good facilities provided to public.
On the other hand
, building ring roads and flyover will reduce the congestion on
road
Suggestion
the road
roads
 a
people
Suggestion
person
 will be less frustrated while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to work when they have important work
also
 ring roads will
connect many other
Suggestion
connect with many other
connect to many other
 roads
.
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.
Moreover
, seprate lane for ambulance should be build to saves life of an innociant
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