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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. "Do you think" the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there is a growing trend for students to relocate abroad to continue their education despite numerous obstacles. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that the advantages in terms of exposure and job opportunities make it stronger than any disadvantages it might have.
Firstly
, students that do not take the opportunity to study abroad limits their experience and knowledge of the world.
This
 means that they will have less understanding of the different languages and cultures which could limit their job prospects later in life.
For instance
, many multi-national companies require their graduate employees to be fluent in a
second
 language.
This
 will be very difficult to achieve for someone who has not immersed himself or herself in another language at some point. Another reason to consider is that not being culturally aware could lead to an individual accidentally offending someone else.
For example
, not everyone knows that it is offensive in the Japanese culture to only use one hand when accepting a business card.
Furthermore
, having the opportunity to travel outside of one's fatherland provides an ample avenue to get to know about other peoples cultures.
In addition
, It
also
 strengthens inter-traits relationships,
this
 result of
this
 could promote a stronger economic ties between countries. In conclusion,
although
 there are some disadvantages of of having to study abroad, it's numerous benefits
such
 as exposures to the cultures of the outside world and promoting relationships and economics ties overshadows any of its demerits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Global citizenship
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Cutting-edge facilities
  • Networking opportunities
  • Career advancement
  • Financial constraints
  • Acclimatization challenges
  • Support network
  • Educational disparity
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Bilingualism
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