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In some countries, even though the rates of crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Several countries rates of crimes are at the lowest level, but its population has less confidence in their security than ever before.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss that
cause
 of
such
 situation is a liberal attitude towards a firearms buying, followed by a discussion that imposing an extra
taxation
Suggestion
tax
 is the most viable solution. The primary
cause
 why people lose confidence in their safety is rising amount of firearms held by persons living nearby and the fact that sometimes
this
men
Suggestion
man
 and women could have a mental illness. Recently,
news
Suggestion
the news
 was
overhelmed
overcome, as with emotions or perceptual stimuli
overwhelmed
 with stories of shooting in schools and religious buildings and the
cause
 of
such
 violence is a liberal attitude for a gun owning.
For example
, not long ago The CNN showed that in some states of The USA you don't need anything except an ID card for purchasing a gun and
furthermore
 the buyer shouldn't wait for a week before getting a firearm in his property. The most efficient way in which to deal with
this
 situation is to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 prices for guns so high that teens and persons without
regular job
Suggestion
a regular job
regular jobs
 couldn't buy it. Men and women that
cause
 shooting in public places usually blame others for their misfits and
as a result
 they buy guns and shoot people.
For instance
, The WHO published research that showed that almost 30 percentages of low-earning persons
irrationaly
in an irrational manner
irrationally
 blame other cultural, religious and social groups. In conclusion, in some nations violence levels extremely low nowadays, but residents feel less safe than before. The main
cause
 for
such
 situation is
a
Suggestion
an
 easy way to get a gun and the most viable solution is to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 taxes for firearms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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