When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We have been the witness of urban

upgration

the state of being in effect or being operative

operation

during

this

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current era.

construction sector

Suggestion

The construction sector

Construction sector

is transforming entire civilization

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

a different direction where every single

facilities

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facility

will be within a walking distance so that

any one

any person

anyone

can avail it during

emergency

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an emergency

emergencies

This

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essay will elaborate the positive points in

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first section

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the first section

and in

second

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part you are able to get to know what the disadvantages is after

such

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urbanization. Coming to the

this

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section, having

optimistic mind

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an optimistic mind

, as per my

stand

Suggestion

standard

points, urbanization helps society to grow in another beautiful direction which not only provides us a modern lifestyle but

also

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assures one to bring balance to

daily schedule

Suggestion

a daily schedule

. Mostly,

this

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category of society is raising up near the IT sectors which is reducing the gap between office and home place.

For example

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, in

kolkata

one of the largest cities in India and one of the largest cities in the world; located in eastern India; suffers from poverty and overcrowding

Kolkata

, Sapoorji Paloonji raised up

few years

Suggestion

a few years

back with numerous facilities

such

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as public &

children

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children's

park, swimming pool, various sports areas & shopping centre. With all facilities where people would love to stay there in order to balance their life with tight work schedule. In short, to spend free time with ourselves or family members

such

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developments are required nowadays for

maintain

Suggestion

maintaining

a healthy lifestyle. In other hand, in order to make our life easy and comfortable we are losing space for cultivation which is

effecting

arousing affect

affecting

entire farming system

Suggestion

the entire farming system

. As fertile land

areas decreasing

Accept comma addition

areas, decreasing

, our entire civilization may lack of having naturally growing crops & vegetables. In short, while planning to transform our life to other paths we must keep in mind the entire farming system. In conclusion, modernization

is crucial for our lifestyle but to some extend

Suggestion

extends crucial for our lifestyle, but to some

extends crucial for our lifestyle but to some

it can be harmful when we cannot save fertile land for crops and grains.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

288 words

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