When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

We have been the witness of urban
upgration
the state of being in effect or being operative
operation
during
this
current era.
construction sector
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The construction sector
Construction sector
is transforming entire civilization
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
a different direction where every single
facilities
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facility
will be within a walking distance so that
any one
any person
anyone
can avail it during
emergency
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an emergency
emergencies
.
This
essay will elaborate the positive points in
first section
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the first section
and in
second
part you are able to get to know what the disadvantages is after
such
urbanization. Coming to the
this
section, having
optimistic mind
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an optimistic mind
, as per my
stand
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standard
points, urbanization helps society to grow in another beautiful direction which not only provides us a modern lifestyle but
also
assures one to bring balance to
daily schedule
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a daily schedule
. Mostly,
this
category of society is raising up near the IT sectors which is reducing the gap between office and home place.
For example
, in
kolkata
one of the largest cities in India and one of the largest cities in the world; located in eastern India; suffers from poverty and overcrowding
Kolkata
, Sapoorji Paloonji raised up
few years
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a few years
back with numerous facilities
such
as public &
children
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children's
park, swimming pool, various sports areas & shopping centre. With all facilities where people would love to stay there in order to balance their life with tight work schedule. In short, to spend free time with ourselves or family members
such
developments are required nowadays for
maintain
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maintaining
a healthy lifestyle. In other hand, in order to make our life easy and comfortable we are losing space for cultivation which is
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
entire farming system
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the entire farming system
. As fertile land
areas decreasing
Accept comma addition
areas, decreasing
, our entire civilization may lack of having naturally growing crops & vegetables. In short, while planning to transform our life to other paths we must keep in mind the entire farming system. In conclusion, modernization
is crucial for our lifestyle but to some extend
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extends crucial for our lifestyle, but to some
extends crucial for our lifestyle but to some
it can be harmful when we cannot save fertile land for crops and grains.
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