When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We have been the witness of urban

upgration

the state of being in effect or being operative

operation

during

this

current era.

construction sector

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The construction sector

Construction sector

is transforming entire civilization

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

a different direction where every single

facilities

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facility

will be within a walking distance so that

any one

any person

anyone

can avail it during

emergency

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an emergency

emergencies

This

essay will elaborate the positive points in

first section

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the first section

and in

second

part you are able to get to know what the disadvantages is after

such

urbanization. Coming to the

this

section, having

optimistic mind

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an optimistic mind

, as per my

stand

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standard

points, urbanization helps society to grow in another beautiful direction which not only provides us a modern lifestyle but

also

assures one to bring balance to

daily schedule

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a daily schedule

. Mostly,

this

category of society is raising up near the IT sectors which is reducing the gap between office and home place.

For example

, in

kolkata

one of the largest cities in India and one of the largest cities in the world; located in eastern India; suffers from poverty and overcrowding

Kolkata

, Sapoorji Paloonji raised up

few years

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a few years

back with numerous facilities

such

as public &

children

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children's

park, swimming pool, various sports areas & shopping centre. With all facilities where people would love to stay there in order to balance their life with tight work schedule. In short, to spend free time with ourselves or family members

such

developments are required nowadays for

maintain

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maintaining

a healthy lifestyle. In other hand, in order to make our life easy and comfortable we are losing space for cultivation which is

effecting

arousing affect

affecting

entire farming system

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the entire farming system

. As fertile land

areas decreasing

Accept comma addition

areas, decreasing

, our entire civilization may lack of having naturally growing crops & vegetables. In short, while planning to transform our life to other paths we must keep in mind the entire farming system. In conclusion, modernization

is crucial for our lifestyle but to some extend

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extends crucial for our lifestyle, but to some

extends crucial for our lifestyle but to some

it can be harmful when we cannot save fertile land for crops and grains.

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When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the advantages?