WRITING TASK 2You should spend about 40minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250words

Over the years, more privileged countries have made numerous donations for
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the ones
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need, but
the problem of poverty has not been solved yet. In my opinion, financial assistance is not the key. Finances through support
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from developing
from developed
nations are usually received by authorities, organizations or even worse by the government and in many cases the funds are not distributed adequately (if at all) to the people who are starving, who do not have the resources to send their children to school, who live in unstable houses or on the streets. Even if the
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an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
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reached the people in need, the problem is solved only temporarily, because money is not forever.
Furthermore
, in a country
that is
desperately impoverished, and hasn’t industry or infrastructure, what does money afford? Looking
further
, due to their financial status, developed countries should find other methods of assistance, that have long
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term objectives
and results.. One solution might be to invest
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in local
infrastructure projects,
such
as building schools and paying teachers to educate the children. History proves that a lack of education is the main cause of many problems, from poverty to
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war
.
This
way the future generations will be able
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to create
a positive change, invest back into their country, transform it into a place worth living and make sure that they won’t make the same
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mistakes as
their ancestors who let the country down. In conclusion, I agree with the fact that rich countries should give other types of help to less stable and well off countries rather than financial aid, because money
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goes as
the wind blows and knowledge is the only thing that remains
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even when you’ve got nothing.
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