The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives you information on how
children
travelled to and from
school
in the years 1990 and 2010. The modes of transport were by
car
, walking, cycling, walking and by
bus
and by
bus
only. A striking feature in
this
chart is that the
number
of
children
who travelled by
car
has increased from 1990 to 2010. In 1990 the most
number
of
trips
per year by
children
were by walking.
However
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in
2010
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2010,
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it reduced to up to 6
million
trips
per year. The total
number
of
trips
to
school
by cycling and walking and
bus
were
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was
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approximately 6
million
in 1990.
However
the
number
of
trips
to
school
by cycling
reduced
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was reduced
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to 2
million
and the
number
of
trips
to
school
by walking and
bus
reduced
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was reduced
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to about 3
million
in 2010. There isn’t a significant change to the
number
of
trips
to
school
by
bus
. In 1990 it was about 7
million
and in 2010 it came down to approximately 5
million
. In 1990 the
amount
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number
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of
children
who travelled to and from
school
by
car
was significantly lower than the
children
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number of children
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who travelled
by
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on
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walking.
In contrast
in
2010
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2010,
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the
number
of
children
who travelled to
school
by
car
increased and the
number
of
children
walking to
school
has
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decreased. In 2010
children
travelled to
school
by
bus
more than they cycled to
school
.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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