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Some people think that team sports are very important for children to succeed in their career, others disagree? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that formal
education
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 should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of
age
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.
Education
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 is not the filling of a pail, but the lighting of a fire. Some people think that learning in early
age
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 is not preferable; others think that it is so beneficial to start learning formal
education
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 in the early
age
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. The ones who think it is not better to start learning formally before the
age
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 of seven find it hard for the young to be involved in
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education process
Suggestion
the education process
. They believe that the children should live their normal life with happiness and freedom, without any stress or pressure. They
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 think that their brains are not ready for getting any kind of formal
education
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 before the
age
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 of seven. Their suggestion is to have them under supervision of their parents; providing them with
basic level
Suggestion
a basic level
 of learning.
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, the ones who think it is more productive to start learning formally deem that the minds of the kids, in
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age
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, is suitable for learning easily. As the kids could imitate anything they
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
 and see facilely.
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, they will be developed in social and emotional connections at short notice. Definitely, it will help them in later stages of educational career. In my opinion, to start early formal
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 for children is the best of all. I feel that children in
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age
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 can be improved expeditiously. Early experiences provide the base for the mind’s supervisory improvement and learning skills throughout life
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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