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High stakes English language tests such as IELTS are increasingly being delivered on computer. Do the advantages of computer based testing outweighs the disadvantages.

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In order to ensure that law and justice must prevail, many countries have started
broadcasting public
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broadcasting, public
 hearings on the cable networks. While there are many people who favour
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 a decision, there are many people who are against
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 a deed.
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 a system with logical reasons to observe which outweighs the other. The
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 and foremost advantage of a televised hearing is the transparency that it brings to the masses, as it is not possible for one and all to be
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 the court premises during the proceedings.
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,
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 an activity
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 helps in increasing the level of legal education amongst the public which in turn increases awareness.
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, people watching legal proceedings can come across many laws which they might be unaware of before and can use the same for their own protection during a mishap.
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,
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 public hearings can
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 have a devastating effect on the people who might not be ready to encounter
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 things in their life.
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The broadcast
 of
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 a show can result in
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children, adapting
 inappropriate
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 they might encounter while watching.
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, since the proceedings would be public the jury can feel pressured if they had to vote against what people think as people might form opposite opinions due to lack of legal education.
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 pressure can deviate them from making the correct decision. To summarise,
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 there appears to be an argument against television broadcasting of trials, I firmly believe that
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 broadcasting of
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 judicial proceedings can bring tremendous benefits in terms of education purposes,
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, it outweighs the former.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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