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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Using the computers has a positive impact on children. Learning from an early age is an initiative step so it is a good step to use
computers but
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computers, but
 its
time
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 should not proceed so
longer
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long
.
This
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 essay will
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 the benefits and drawbacks of using computers. Technology is a basic necessity in
fast paced life
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a fast paced life
the fast paced life
 and it is far better to train offspring from an early age of handling it, familiar with all terms and operating it. The main advantage of using it is that it enhanced the cognitive skills of a
child
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, through
internet
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the internet
 he will be able to get access to unlimited information. At the click of
button
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a button
 he may study subjects of his own interest like geography, history, anatomy, space. He can seek knowledge of any country and retrieve the information.
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, a
child
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 can get
acquaintance
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acquainted
 about the cutting edge technology and innovations in every field of life.
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, children can shop through online. Despite of having a myriad of positive points, there are some disadvantages which can be controlled by the parents. Like excess of using computers for long hours is not good for a
child
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 as it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 vision and children are fond of playing games on laptops
,
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,
 gadgets rather than outdoor physical activity. So
inspite
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in spite
 of sedentary lifestyle, parents should encourage children to have some outdoor exercise in free
time
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 and
time
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of
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by
 using a computer should be fixed so that a
child
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 can manage to get information in the free
time
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. To conclude, computers are used in schools and homes and has become mandatory in order to get success. As assignments and presentations can be don’t only in computers.
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, no matter whether its excessive usage causes
eye sight problem
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eye sight problems
an eye sight problem
 or any other health issue. The long hours can be reduced to limited
time
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.

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