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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People hold different views about whether constructing new houses should be based on t
raditional architecture
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the traditional architecture
of the locality or their own choice and style. I agree with the view that new housing should follow the main structure of the area because of its aesthetic and historical values. On the one hand, those who are in f
avor
promote over another
favour
of modem architectural style argue that modern construction is more cost-effective since traditional construction materials are highly costly.
For instance
, natural stones which were used in old buildings are very expensive today.
Therefore
, new estates a
re tend
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tend
to be built by using more affordable materials.
On the other hand
, there are strong arguments that new houses should adopt the existing structure style of a local a
reas.
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area
 From a historical perspective, old buildings are the tangible cultural heritage of a locality. Buildings which have historical significance provide a link to our roots, while a modern estate designed by property developers is certainly incompatible with h
istorical connection.
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historical connections
a historical connection
 In terms of a
esthetics
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aesthetic
values, modem houses compared with traditional dwellings are an eyesore. They fail to blend in with the h
ousing which
Accept comma addition
housing, which
has grown during centuries. In conclusion,
although
 it may be costlier, the traditional architecture of localities s
trongly enhance
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strongly enhances
locals’ aesthetics and cultural features.

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