Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that now we can watch movies on gadgets we do not need to attend movie theatre. Some think that to be really liked movies must seen in a movie theatre. In
this
essay I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion. To see
films
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the films
on our tablets and
phones there
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phones, there
is no need to go to the
cinema
. On my tablet I see every
film
I want to see.
Also
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Also, this
this
way is cheap. Each month I pay £9 and I watch many films in my home or on
train
Suggestion
the train
a train
trains
. If something
happen I
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happens, I
happens I
can stop and do it and later I can watch my
film
again. I like
this
and
then
I fully enjoy it as my stress is not there.
In addition
, I like to go the
cinema
. I like my friends and me to meet up and go to
cinema
Suggestion
the cinema
and if I see my
boyfriend I
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boyfriend, I
like to go to
cinema
Suggestion
the cinema
to see a
film
to gether
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
.
Last
year on my birthday many friends and
me
refers to the speaker or writer
I
all went to
cinema
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the cinema
to gether
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
and we watched Deep Water Horizon. I enjoyed
this
and my friends too, because the big screen showed more information and because the sound quality was better than at home. May be in my house we will not be so happy to watch
this
film
and see the famous actor.
Also we
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Also, we
enjoyed the popcorn and coke we could buy. In
conclusion in
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conclusion, in
my house I like to watch films on my tablet. It is cheap and easy for me, but I
also
like to go to
cinema
Suggestion
the cinema
to see films, especially with friends. Maybe both are good to fully enjoy films at different times and with different people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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