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Comparison on the route now and later after the development of city centre hospital

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The two maps give
comparison
Suggestion
a comparison
 between the changes taken place to get an
access
 to the
city
 hospital in the
year
 2007 and 2010. There are
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of developments that took place in the
year
 2010 In the
year
 2007 the
city
road
 connecting to reach the hospital was narrow. The car
park
 and the bus stop does not seem to be properly organised as
bus stop
Suggestion
the bus stop
 was
next
 to Car
park
. It can be observed from the map that in the
year
 2010 the
road
access
 to
city
 hospital was more broaden that it was previously. There was a separate section allotted for
public car
Suggestion
public car parks
the public car park
park
 and for
staff car
Suggestion
a staff car park
the staff car park
park
 for
city
 hospital staff. There was a separate bus station built which was more organised as compared to 2007. Unlike the narrow
road
 in the
year
 2007 there were roundabouts built connecting the
city
road
 and hospital
road
 in the
year
 2010.
This
 will help curtail the traffic congestion leading to easy
road
access
 to
city hospital
Suggestion
the city hospital
a city hospital
city hospitals
. To summarise, the
road
access
 to
city
 hospital in the
year
 2010 was more organised and convenient than it was in the
year
 2007
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