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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences.

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Nowadays so
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Nowadays, so
 many employees are staying at
office more
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the office more
 than home due to the
work
.
staying
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Staying
 more
time
at
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in
 office
have
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has
 pros and cons here we will discuss. To embark on, being at workplace to do
work
 people have many advantages
firstly
, they can learn more skills and involving major implementation to reach the deadlines the result is offer incentives and promotions by company/organisation,
second
 is addiction of learning in different skills people will get priority at their circumstance.
In addition
, employee have a chance to interact core members around and getting the more knowledge on their source of
work
 means one of the best chance to share with peers so that they can optimise the
time
 of other employees. On
other hand
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the other hand
, disadvantages of working at
office
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the office
an office
 late nights are we can consider feeling stressful will make tied causes to not having good sleep.
sometimes
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Sometimes
 we will endure with
work
 which will not complete on
time
.
other
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Another
Other
 part is people can not spend
time
 with their children result can be missing the caring for toddlers and having
time
 with kids will impact on their good behaviour, and coming to body people should maintain excises for healthy life due busy schedule with
work
 and lack of
time
can not
can not
cannot
 maintain physical health,
finally
 impact on eyes they will get dark circles beneath of the eyes.

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