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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this?

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Travelling to different countries might open up opportunities for both travellers and
country
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. In my opinion, travelling between countries should be allowed with at utmost care. I would like to discuss both benefits and drawbacks in
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To begin
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 with, countries should open opportunity for people who like to immigrate and live in the
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 is because people might be interested in multiple opportunities offered,
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 as jobs or businesses to build their career path.
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, citizens' of developing countries like India are moving to developed countries like Canada or the USA for better quality of lifestyle and opportunities.
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 to that, some people require to migrate because of the economic or political problems within the
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, people of Syria need to move out of the
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 as a refugee due to war.
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, huge number of migrants might cause a huge lose for the
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. People who are highly skilled are require to fill jobs within the
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 might cause a huge impact on both economy and stability. To illustrate, doctors from Africa started to migrate as a refugee causing insufficient help to local people.
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, people who immigrate should be thoroughly inspected as some people might be a threat to the nation, as they might involve in terrorism or other illicit activities.
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, the USA immigration has strict rules imposed after the 9/11 terror attack causing hundreds of deaths. In conclusion, the government authorities of different countries should impose proper rules and regulations for immigration keeping the security of the nation in mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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