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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing the traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.

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I would like to discuss two different views on the same issue, which in
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 the solution to improve it. Traffic accidents are to increase in the UK, and many people are convinced that, to improve
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, and reduce the number of accidents, punishment for driving offences should be stricter. I can imagine that, a threat of really high ticket fee could stop some of the people from speeding on the roads, and it can reduce the number of speeding drivers,
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, I can easily imagine, a huge amount of drivers, failing to stop and trying to escape from the police
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 causing chaos on the roads and creating a greater threat to pedestrians, and other traffic users. High fines can
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 put people into the financial difficulties, and increase the number of drivers losing their driving licences and driving without it.
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, we have people who are convinced that we can improve the
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 by using other measures, like covering more city roads with low speed limit, implementing the improvements on the roads like speed bombers and traffic cameras, but mainly by educating people about
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 thought speed awareness courses, and companion clips clearly showing all aspects of dangerous driving and consequences. I'm polish and in Poland we have very strict punishments for driving offences, and it has not improved
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 in the past 15 years since I obtain my diving licence. I strongly believe that education is a key to success, and we should improve
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 on the roads by educating people from a very young age, maybe by giving them the opportunity to access free driving courses, where they can learn additional skills and knowledge how to drive safely.

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