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Write a minimum of 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Nuclear weapons'
development
Suggestion
developer
 keeps any violent act silent, meaning that its threat maintains everyone, watching out every movement form others while being prepared just in case.
Otherwise
, nuclear power can be used to create cleaner and more affordable
energy
 than fossil fuels. That shows excellent advantages taken from its development when it used correctly. In my opinion, nuclear
energy
can be seen positive
Suggestion
can be seen as positive
 overall;
nevertheless
 I consider it hides some environmental pollution issues. Developing
this
 kind of
energy
 can bring new sources of providing cheaper
energy
 to more people in an easy way and the most important aspect, they could
affordably
 get it regarding their incomes. In fact, societies can be more independent of fossil fuels, which have done huge damage
in
Suggestion
to
 our environment.
On the other hand
, at military use, these weapons can result in an imminent danger and risk to the whole world, but noticing
this
also
 would force attacks and aggression among rivals because whether they use it or not could destroy or maintain peace in their countries, respectively. What's more, the level of destruction it is capable of causing is too unthinkable that its fear to be done stops people from using it whenever they would require. As seeing, the advantages
this
appeals
Suggestion
appeal
 to everyone's satisfaction on
ecofriendly
 agendas,
energy
 and power are not enough because it is not committed
to stop
Suggestion
to stopping
 contaminating,
although
 somehow it is
more cleaner
Suggestion
cleaner
more clean
 than the traditional sources of
energy
.
In addition
, its polluting effects on people, animals and so on if it is not highly supervised could bring more damages than benefits to our lives.

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