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Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Men (
vs
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) women have always been a hot contest in most parts of the underdeveloped countries. Most people think men do better compared to women in the managerial posts. There are both pros and cons for
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 topic. It all comes to the type of work they need to manage. If the work is more physical and requires lifting heavy weights or something
else
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else, then
then
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 in
this
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scenerio
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
 men do better compared to women and vice versa. A recent study proves that women keep
more effort
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the more effort
 compared to men doing the came type of project. But when it comes to giving a chance to women there is no harm in it and I do stand on
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. Without giving
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 how can a person prove themselves..? I would like to take an example of my boss and she works quite on par with the other managers which I had over the past
fer
being one more than three
four
few
 years. Overall concluding men and women are the same and will never change. The only thing we should change is our mindset and the way we think.

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