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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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People are always in search of
happiness
, sometimes without even having
precise definition
Suggestion
a precise definition
 of it. Indeed, it is a hard issue to give a formula of
happiness
, since the perception of it can differ from
person
 to
person
. So one should understand his
/
her own personality to find or formulate his
/
her own
happiness
. Throughout its history the humanity tried to define the
happiness
, whether connecting it to a
person
's health condition, love relations, importance given him
/
her by others, to name but three, or relating it to non-terrestrial things,
such
 as peace after death. Of course, all things mentioned above are fundamental in our lives. It is difficult to imagine a happy
life
 with damaged health or
hatered
rope or canvas headgear for a horse, with a rope for leading
haltered
heated
 from the side of loved ones. But it will not be a surprise to see a
person
 who feels happy even on the brink of death, since he
/
she believes in eternal
life
. The path to
happiness
 passes through
selfawarness
awareness of your own individuality
self-awareness
 and
selfreflection
Suggestion
self reflection
. If a
person
 understands what makes him
/
her to feel delight,
then
 it will become much easier to
multiplate
Suggestion
multi-plate
multiply
 blissful moments the
life
. For someone, who enjoys the company of friends or family, every
such
 meeting with them can bring
happiness
, and
on the contrary
, if someone prefers
life
 in solitude, these meetings can be just a burden. To sum up, there are numerous and varied
recepies
directions for making something
recipes
 of
happiness
, depending on who gives it, and everyone has his
/
her own taste of delight, which can seem not so much tasty
for
Suggestion
to
 others.
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