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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
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People are always in search of
happiness
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, sometimes without even having
precise definition
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a precise definition
 of it. Indeed, it is a hard issue to give a formula of
happiness
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, since the perception of it can differ from
person
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 to
person
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. So one should understand his
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her own personality to find or formulate his
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her own
happiness
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. Throughout its history the humanity tried to define the
happiness
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, whether connecting it to a
person
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's health condition, love relations, importance given him
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her by others, to name but three, or relating it to non-terrestrial things,
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 as peace after death. Of course, all things mentioned above are fundamental in our lives. It is difficult to imagine a happy
life
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 with damaged health or
hatered
rope or canvas headgear for a horse, with a rope for leading
haltered
heated
 from the side of loved ones. But it will not be a surprise to see a
person
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 who feels happy even on the brink of death, since he
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she believes in eternal
life
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. The path to
happiness
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 passes through
selfawarness
awareness of your own individuality
self-awareness
 and
selfreflection
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self reflection
. If a
person
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 understands what makes him
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her to feel delight,
then
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 it will become much easier to
multiplate
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multi-plate
multiply
 blissful moments the
life
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. For someone, who enjoys the company of friends or family, every
such
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 meeting with them can bring
happiness
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, and
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, if someone prefers
life
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 in solitude, these meetings can be just a burden. To sum up, there are numerous and varied
recepies
directions for making something
recipes
 of
happiness
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, depending on who gives it, and everyone has his
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her own taste of delight, which can seem not so much tasty
for
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to
 others.
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