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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The two maps
compares
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 details about the road access in the years 2007 and 2010, connecting to a
city
 hospital.
Overall
, A lot
have
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has
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 been changed from 2007 to 2011 but the basic structure of
ring
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the ring
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 road remains the same. The development of three
roundabout
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roundabouts
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, in an effort to smooth the traffic flow and complement the recently build bus station, is one of the major
noticable
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noticeable
difference
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. The bus stop which was
in
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on
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 the
north east
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northeast
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 side of the
city
,
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 is shifted to the
south west
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southwest
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 side of the town. A new roundabout is constructed down to the south side of the area. Two other roundabouts are developed connecting the hospital road to
to
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the bus station, set up in the
south west
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southwest
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 direction and to the
city
 hospital towards the north. Car
park
, which was earlier the combination of staff and public
park
 is now
seperated
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separated
 to form
individual
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the individual
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park
.
Staff
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The staff
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 car
park
 is made in the south of the
city
 hospital
wheras
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whereas
 the car
park
 remains at the same position back in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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