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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences.

Undoubtedly, traditional people
work
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 to complete their basic needs like food, shelter and
clothing but
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clothing, but
 in today’s scenario people
give
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will give
 more and more preference to
work
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 for comfort life and stay less
time
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 with own family.
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,
this
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 trend creates positive and negative effects. To commence with, there are various advantages in support of
work
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 more. The most prominent one of them is that when person spend precious
time
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on
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at
work
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then
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, his social network increase and come across with different kind of people, culture and tradition that helps to increase knowledge as well as experience.
For instance
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, during
work
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 period person attends global level conferences and goes through with
distinguish
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distinguished
distinguishing
 psychological people and catch
number
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numbers
 of ideas about them.
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, if people
work
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 a lot they can make huge bank balance with the help of
money individual can
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money an individual can
 buy luxurious life style as well as all
kind
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kinds
 of facilities, which include bungalow, expensive cars, medical support and healthy food.
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, downsides of
spend
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spending
 more
time
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on
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at
work
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cannot be ignore
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cannot ignore
cannot be ignored
.
Initially
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, scarcity of bond with
family member
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family members
a family member
 and
enjoy
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enjoys
 less
time
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 with kids and other members of
family
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the family
. Due to that kids accompanied by bad people and start to take drugs along with
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 forget the morals and culture of the family because of absence of parents. To illustrate, parents go to
work
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 in
morning
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the morning
 and return at
night
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night, then
then
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 child half of the day stay at school and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
time
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 live alone because of which love falls short.
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, people cannot maintain health because they do not take enough rest and most of persons
do sitting
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are sitting
do sit
 jobs and do not give
time
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 for exercise which give birth to
number
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a number
 of diseases
such
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 as, obesity, cancer, diabetes and body aches. To conclude, there is strong disputation on both sides of the case. My personal agreement is that
work
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 and personal balance life should be maintained at
individual level
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the individual level
.

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