Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. However it is becoming apparent that in countries such as the USA and Australia, illiteracy is on the increase.

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Illiteracy
has not been a problem for most
western
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countries
ever since the spread of the public
education
system. It has traditionally been viewed as a problem for
countries
with limited resources to create a competent
education
system.
However
, in recent years,
illiteracy
has been rising in developed
countries
such
as the United States and Australia. The following essay will examine some plausible causes,
such
as lack of funding and
rise
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of poverty, and discuss some of its possible consequences on society. One possible explanation for the rise of
illiteracy
is the lack of funding. Without proper funding, it is impossible to give every
students
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a competent
education
. It is known that in some parts of the US, educational systems are underfunded. If schools do not have enough resources to properly educate
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student, the quality of
education
students receive will be dramatically decreased. Another possible explanation
if
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the rise of poverty in cities. Some parents simply do not have the financial means to support a child through school. Many kids who
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from
a
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impoverished background often end up with
low paying
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jobs and addiction
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and often forgets about even the most essential materials,
such
as reading and writing at a competent level. Of course,
illiteracy
is a serious threat
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society. It significantly decreases the productivity of those who are affected. Those who are illiterate cannot
preform
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high skilled
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jobs.
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, it would be impossible for someone who's illiterate to be promoted to a management position since those positions require an advanced level of comprehension. In conclusion, an increase
illiteracy
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poses a big threat
for
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the
countries
involved. If
this
trend is not reversed, the situation can become very serious.
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