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Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. However it is becoming apparent that in countries such as the USA and Australia, illiteracy is on the increase.

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It is true that
illiteracy
 is becoming a serious
problem
 in industrialised nations.
This
 is surprising as most people think that
this
 is a
problem
 only in under-developed nations
such
 as in parts of Africa and India.
Illiteracy
 is related to many other problems
such
 as poverty, over-population and governmental corruption. Let us take a more detailed look at the causes of
this
 growing
problem
 in many Western nations. One of the most obvious reasons for the increase in
illiteracy
 is the advent of television. Children no longer have to read to obtain information. Neither do they have to read to relax. Today children get home from school and go straight to “the box” to watch their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 program. Watching television is much easier and more exciting than reading. Another reason for the increase in
illiteracy
 is the fact that so many women work.
This
 means that children are often alone at home and so they are unsupervised. When parents get
home they
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home, they
 are often too tired to spend quality time
whit
expresses the means used
with
 their children. It is
also
 true that many people blame
schools
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the schools
 for the decline in
illiteracy
. In many
countries there
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countries, there
 has been a move away from teaching basic skills
such
 as reading and writing. There are many effects of
this
 growing
illiteracy
 rate. The most obvious is unemployment.
This
 may in turn lead to alcohol and drug abuse. Ultimately the economy of the country begins to suffer and there is a drop in living standards. To address
this
problem
, parents need to become more aware of their responsibilities and schools need to consider a change in their teaching methods. If
this
 worsening trend is not reversed, the
problem
 of
illiteracy
 will become very serious.
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