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Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It's scientifically proven that human understand pictures and diagrams more easily than the text and with less attention. But the downside is that, a viewer can grasp the pretty much same information as what has been shown in the films or television. In my opinion, reading books keeps
person
's mind active because it requires reader's full attention and imagination. One of the reasons I believe books are better for the mind is because the readers need to understand and think critically to understand the text.
For example
, a movie can be understood by anyone as long as he understands the language.
On the other hand
, for reading the
person
 has to understand the context and need to use his/her imagination to get the gist of the passage. Another reason is that, reading doesn't provide the exact scene whereas movies does. Films does not leave anything to
person's imagination
Suggestion
the person's imagination
, that's why it keeps the
brain less
not using intelligence
brainless
 engaged.
For instance
, if a
person
 reads Harry Porter books
first
 and
then
 watch
movie
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movie, then
then
 he/she will be highly disappointed because the film fails to match the
person's
Suggestion
people's
 imaginations. In Conclusion, I will say that films and movies are good when you try to understand/
graps
hold firmly
grasp
 something faster, but if you want to treat your mind
then
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than
 read.
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