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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times, and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books.What is your opinion about this?

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It is
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 by some parents that children should only concentrate on reading academic books and believe that reading
entertainment
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 books is a wasteful activity. I completely disagree with
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 notion because books with
entertainment
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 content help children to build their creativity and imagination and improve their linguistic skills. While reading
entertainment
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 books, children build an imaginary world and their
mind stimulates
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mind, stimulates
 the same action which is narrated in the book resulting in an increase of brain activity and mental development.
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, Norway has made
entertainment
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 books to be included compulsory in pre-elementary school as it would help their
young
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younger
 generation to be creative and imaginative which would help them more in their adulthood.
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,
entertainment
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 books help an individual to build a strong vocabulary and increase their
language
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 adeptness. Reading
entertainment
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 books
is
Suggestion
are
 a fun activity unlike academic books,
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, it is unlikely they will get tired,
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 prolonged hours of reading will help them to acquire
lexical resource
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lexical resources
a lexical resource
 and make them
language
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 proficient. A typical example of
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 would be a famous politician Shashi Tharoor, who was a keen reader in his childhood,
this
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 interest enabled him to learn new words and
today
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todays
 world knows him more of a
language
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 expert than a politician, many call him a human dictionary. His
language
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 proficiency has helped him to gain a huge following that has helped him in his political career too. In conclusion,
entertainment
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 books are beneficial for children as it surges their thought process and expands their
language
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 knowledge.

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