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Some people believe that universities are producing more graduates than is needed, and that less emphasis should be placed on university education. Others are of a different opinion. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that the number of students who graduate from universities is on the rise. Some people argue that since there are not enough jobs for all graduates, people should stop giving too much importance to university education. I do not quite agree with
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 view because finding a white collar job should never be the only objective of going to university. It is now widely believed that a university education is essential for success in the workplace. And
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 true. Graduates are likely to command better pay packets than undergraduates. Graduates are
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 more likely to get a promotion. There is one problem, though. While the number of graduates is on the rise, there aren’t enough jobs for all of them. That means a large of number of fresh graduates are unemployed because they can’t find jobs that meet their level of academic qualification. On the flip side, plenty of jobs are available in the labour sector.
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, most graduates are reluctant to accept these jobs because they are looking for white collar jobs. When they can’t find those jobs they become discouraged. Does
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 mean that students should stop going to universities? The answer is an emphatic NO. Education is one of those skills that can never harm its possessor. One can never be over-educated.
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 imparting job-related skills, universities
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 make students better equipped to face the challenges of life. By not acquiring higher education a person will only impair his chances of success in life. In conclusion, by not going to universities, we can’t solve any problem. What we need is a change in the mindset. We must realize that all forms of labour are dignified. We must stop thinking that because we are educated we should only work in
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an office
the office
 like environments.
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