IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

the chats below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

#chats #information #ages #population #yemen #projections
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The charts illustrate the data about the ages of two countries, more specifically of Italy and Yemen in two different periods, in 2000 and 2050. Overall, it is clear that Yemen in 2000 had fewer elderly people compared to the Italian population.
In contrast
Linking Words
, the forecast predicts that the Italian youth citizens will increase while there will be a rise in the elderly inhabitants in Yemen.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the most striking feature on Italian inhabitants
is
Suggestion
are
 its people at 60 years old, in fact, it represented with 61,1%, more than
half
Use synonyms
 population, while the people between 15 54 years and 0 14 years represented only 14.3% and 24.1 % respectively in 2000.
In contrast
Linking Words
, inhabitants of Yemen had more balanced data, its old population constituted
half
Use synonyms
 of the total, whereas its mature people almost
half
Use synonyms
 with 46.3% and the young one with. Only 3.6 %.
However
Linking Words
, it is visible that elderly people will increase to 57.3% in 2050 and mature people will be affected by a reduction to 37%. At the same time, the prediction on the youngest suggests a growth to 5.7 %.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the Italian citizens will be more stable than 2010, its oldest and youngest people will experience a drop over the
half
Use synonyms
 and 11.5% in 2050 respectively, whilst its adult will witness a considerable rise to 42.3%
Submitted by xu.roberto20867 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: