Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement ?

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In present times, technology is getting more and more advanced.
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updating
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updated
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gizmos, same the other side
book
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reading is
an
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a
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so lacking in interest as to cause mental weariness
boring
bearing
boating
activity for children. In present time
television
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is
also
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a way of learning;
however
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, other people think that
television
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cannot take a place of
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book
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books
the book
for learning, and
that is
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a reason why
childern
a young person of either sex
children
have less - educated nowadays. I believe that the
book
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is
more essential way
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a more essential way
of learning rather
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then
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than
television
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, so I partially agree
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embark with
, by reading a
book
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children can develop their reading skill, with the same reading can enhance their knowledge which help them to make good communication and
upbring
formal attendance (in court or at a hearing) of a party in an action
appearing
good thought in
mind
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.
Book
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help children to sharpen their memory power and
consentration
the strength of a solution; number of molecules of a substance in a given volume
concentration
also
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.
Book
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reading can not only increase
fluancy
powerful and effective language
fluency
on
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in
of
language but
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the language, but
the language but
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increase their vocabulary which help them throughout their life. By reading a good
books
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book
they can motivate themselves but they can be a good motivator for others, and
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
ability
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the ability
abilities
of
leader
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a leader
the leader
leaders
. In the other positive view, by reading a historical
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book children can
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book, children can
get
knoledge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
about the history and know
value
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the value
of the culture and tradition. By reading a comic
book
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childern
a young person of either sex
children
can get good
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creative
ideas and
also
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this
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book
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may be
freshnup
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their
mind
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. By reading devotional
book
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children get good
pease
the state prevailing during the absence of war
peace
of
mind
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, and they know
aobut
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
the
reiligions
a strong belief in a supernatural power or powers that control human destiny
religion
.
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,
television
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is
also
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a medium which can be a useful for
learning but
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learning, but
it should have certain limitation. There are many educational shows are broadcasting on
television
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. Many channels
are make
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make
are made
children about
on going senario
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the ongoing scenario
ongoing senario
ongoing scenario
on going scenario
of
world
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the world
and
also
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give information about different
cuntries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
and their details and wildlife overview. But it
can not
can not
cannot
be
neglect
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neglected
that
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after
watching of
television
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is
also
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harmful to
eyes
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the eyes
of children. Sometime crime show and action
scanes
the place where some action occurs
scenes
distract their
mind
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and create
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
negatives
effact
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
. To cite and example, before a year a local physiology collage
make
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makes
an
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a
geneal
applying to all or most members of a category or group
general
final
debates
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debate
on some
prectical
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
analysis, the difference between a
children
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child
who watching
television
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and the children who reading
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book
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the book
. The result shows that the children who read more
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book
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books
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
watching
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watching television, they
television
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they have good score in general knowledge and the have good communication skill,
also
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they
mainsion
make reference to
mention
that they have
good
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better
concentration and
clam
steadiness of mind under stress
calm
nature. To conclude,
televisoin
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
and
book
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both
are help
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help
children to
learn but
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learn, but
by reading a
book
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children can many
benefit
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benefits
:
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:
good memory, sharp
mind
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, good communication skill, good concentration; beside that
television
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has some
advarce
contrary to your interests or welfare
adverse
effect
also
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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