You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between

1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graphic depicts the population
proportion
of
the
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people aged 65 and over in a century
overall
, the
proportion
is less and
increase
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increases
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variably for the japan on the country, the USA shows an opposite change The
proportion
in the USA starts at 9% in 1940& goes through considerable fluctuations
such
as 15% in 1980 & decrease
at
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to
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14 in 2019
and
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finally
, in 2040 it shows 23% Sweden starts at 7% in 1940 follows
a
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by a
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significant rise in the
proportion
till 1980 and reminded relatively steady during 1950 - 2018 and
vary
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varied
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showing 25%
at the end
of the century
However
, is
in
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interesting with Japan as it started with the least
proportion
at 5% in 1940 undergoes a peculiar increment & in 2030 sharply escalated to 25% and in 1940 expand up to 27% overcoming both the USA &Sweden countries.

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