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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.Discuss both these views and give your own

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Language
 is a way of communication different thoughts and it creates an easy environment for everyone. It has been a common thought that many people adopt alien
language
 just to visit and
work
 abroad, yet others do, not only believe on these reasons of having new languages. Not only it provides opportunity to visit and
work
, but
also
 helps someone to understand the culture, history and living style of that place. It is a common belief that people learn a new
language
 just to move abroad and
work
 in
different environment
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different environments
a different environment
. Those people who live in underdeveloped countries do not always get
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
 rewards against their jobs. In order to earn the
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
significant
 amount and live in a healthy
environemt many
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environment, many
environment many
 of the underdeveloped
place try
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places, try
places try
 to learn new languages as they increase their
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 in foreign countries.
Hence by
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Hence, by
 learning developed
countries
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country's
country
language
 gives them an edge to travel and
work
 in a healthy environment.
On the other
hand many
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hand, many
 people think that these
reason
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reasons
 are not enough to satisfy new
language
 learning. It has been found that new
language
 are not only learned to travel but to learn about the culture, history and life. It becomes easy when someone learnt their
language
 and culture.
For example
, many students who live in
germany
a republic in central Europe; split into East Germany and West Germany after World War II and reunited in 1990
Germany
 has found more jobs with
german
of or pertaining to or characteristic of Germany or its people or language
German
language
 skills.
Therefore
,
however
,
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,
 it is very important to know the living style of that region who
language
 you want to learn. In a conclusion, People with dreams
abroad learn
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abroad, learn
new
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a new language
language
 as it helps them to visit and
work
 easily in the country.
on
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On
 the other side some people find other reasons
of
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for
 learning a foreign
language
 like getting
know
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to know
 about their cultural sites and historical perspectives.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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