Some people say that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In urban areas, people believe that cars are the most
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
way to travel, but many contradict by stating bicycles to be superior. In my opinion, a
bicycle
is beneficial in terms of health, environment and savings. The counterpart can be more damaging to one's health and nature.
Although
, some
prefers
Suggestion
prefer
motor vehicles can be convenient and suitable for people who like to live a sedentary lifestyle.
For instance
, people who suffer from a heart condition and wish to move around less by giving difficulty to their body would prefer using a car. Other options like electric cars could not be a viable option as
those
plural of "this"
these
are significantly expensive.
Additionally
, four-wheeler can cause traffic congestion and waste valuable time.
Moreover
, not only, usage of fossil-fuel powered vehicles could heavily impact an
individual's
Suggestion
individual
saving, but
also
releases harmful gases in the environment.
This
convenience could
also
lead to less body
movements
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movement
and cardiovascular activities.
As a result
, it could
deteriorates
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deteriorate
the person's health and well being.
On the other hand
, to embrace the
environment people
Accept comma addition
environment, people
can use the
bicycle
to travel
short distance
Suggestion
a short distance
short distances
and for longer distance they can use public transportation.
For example
, one could ride a
bicycle
to nearby places
such
as, office or to buy groceries etc., and commute by public buses or metro to cover longer distances.
Furthermore
,
this
muscle powered machine would encourage saving and will never be a reason for road congestion. To conclude, in my opinion,
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
is a better option than a motor vehicle. As it is nature-friendly and low budget investment
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