Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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The crime rates keep increasing all over the world. When analysed it is found that it is due to criminals repeating

crimes even

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crimes, even

after going to

prison

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once.

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essay will find out the various reasons for

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and give some action plan to

comtrol

power to direct or determine

control

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problem.

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of all we need to understand the cause behind

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. People in need commit crimes when they are not

able fullfill

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able to fulfil

able fulfil

their need in regular method. Some people who have

psychiatric problem

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a psychiatric problem

cannot help themselves and keep doing criminal activities. When a person returns from

prison

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the society doesn't accept them so the offenders find it difficult to sustain themselves and resort to crimes.

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Also after

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Also, after

visiting the

prison

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once and seeing the

punishment

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criminals feel the reward they get from crime outweighs the

punishment

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so they are ready to repeat the crimes. To control the criminals from repeating crimes we need to take care of all of the above mentioned issues. In the

prison

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we can give them some kind of skill training which can help them in finding a earning job after

prison

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time. Inside the jail all of them need to be taken to a psychiatrist for

checkup

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a checkup

and dealt according to the report of the checkup.

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Also it

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should be mandatory for the criminals to do community service

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such

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activity would bring them in the good eyes of the society. But

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feel the most effective would be to have

harsh

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a harsh punishment

punishment

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for repeat offenders. The

punishment

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should etch a line into the mind for them to never even think about doing the act again. To conclude the action to reduce the rate of crimes is to act on the mentality of the criminals.

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will solve the problem permanently.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

294 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

recidivism
rehabilitation programs
social stigma
ex-convicts
reintegration
support systems
mental health issues
addiction problems
criminal networks
incarceration

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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

Fully explain your ideas

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Essay topics: An Australian friend is coming to visit you, and it will be his/her birthday during the visit. write a letter to your friend In your letter * say how you feel about the visit * suggest what you could do on his/her birthday *try to find out what you friend thinks of your idea

Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the word. what are the causes of it? and what solution do you offer?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?