In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

Recent trend
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The recent trend
A recent trend
of living all alone or in a shared apartment is observed among many
adolscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
around the globe.
This
is mostly after completing their primary education.
Although
, some do
this
as a fantasy and some do
this
for their future development,
this
has negative development than the positive outcome, because, young people might addict to unusual habits and involve in delinquency.
To begin
with, whenever an individual stays out from
what
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what's
meant to be
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
home
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home, then
then
the expenses will hit the sky and it's hard to tackle with all of them and managing them wisely,
moreover
, they encounter different kinds of people if they share a flat with their friends or mutual friends.
This
leads to diversion from the usual habits
such
as waking early or eating healthy, most youth tends to eat unhealthy food when they stay away from home and
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
commit small crimes.
For example
, a recent study on youngster by Missisuaga University reported that they are more likely to commit illegal activities when they are away from home than staying with family. It is likely to be safe and sound when they grow under
supervision
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the supervision
of their parents rather than with friends of no control or borders.
Although
, adults could possibly learn new languages when they explore different places as a part of their residential migration and experience the different cultures, heritages,
this
is only when they are strong
for
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in
themselves but if they are influenced by others for pursuing odd activities it is highly dangerous. Parents are the only one who could care and
teach
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teaches
lessons for a better life and serve delicious food to make sure their child is safe, make them respect values and society.
For instance
, when compared to adults that grow alone to one grown among family the latter ones are strong emotionally and physically because of their
parents
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parents'
lessons and care. In conclusion, it is not mandatory for youngsters
to go
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go
away with friends soon after completing their schooling and spend time with them as
their
in or at that place
there
is
lot
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a lot
lots
of time to do those activities and parents should not be overlooked with the joy of spending out.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-reliance
  • financial responsibility
  • social isolation
  • housing demand
  • personal growth
  • financial strain
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making skills
  • disrupt
  • support networks
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