In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

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The recent trend

A recent trend

of living all alone or in a shared apartment is observed among many

adolscents

a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity

adolescents

around the globe.

This

is mostly after completing their primary education.

Although

, some do

this

as a fantasy and some do

this

for their future development,

this

has negative development than the positive outcome, because, young people might addict to unusual habits and involve in delinquency.

To begin

with, whenever an individual stays out from

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what's

meant to be

expresses position, direction or location, or point in time

home

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home, then

then

the expenses will hit the sky and it's hard to tackle with all of them and managing them wisely,

moreover

, they encounter different kinds of people if they share a flat with their friends or mutual friends.

This

leads to diversion from the usual habits

such

as waking early or eating healthy, most youth tends to eat unhealthy food when they stay away from home and

some times

on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

commit small crimes.

For example

, a recent study on youngster by Missisuaga University reported that they are more likely to commit illegal activities when they are away from home than staying with family. It is likely to be safe and sound when they grow under

supervision

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the supervision

of their parents rather than with friends of no control or borders.

Although

, adults could possibly learn new languages when they explore different places as a part of their residential migration and experience the different cultures, heritages,

this

is only when they are strong

for

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themselves but if they are influenced by others for pursuing odd activities it is highly dangerous. Parents are the only one who could care and

teach

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teaches

lessons for a better life and serve delicious food to make sure their child is safe, make them respect values and society.

For instance

, when compared to adults that grow alone to one grown among family the latter ones are strong emotionally and physically because of their

parents

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parents'

lessons and care. In conclusion, it is not mandatory for youngsters

to go

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away with friends soon after completing their schooling and spend time with them as

their

in or at that place

there

lot

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a lot

lots

of time to do those activities and parents should not be overlooked with the joy of spending out.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

359 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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