the map below shows the changes that have been take place in a seaside area since 1995

#changes #place #area

The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken place in a seaside region since 1995.

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it is clear that

the region experienced significant housing development, becoming more densely populated and modernized. The farmland

which

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situated

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on the northeast

side

no longer exists and

forest

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park was deforested,

this

area is dominated by a

tennis-court

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tennis court

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Also

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the housing area which

located

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is located

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the

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both

side

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of the main road was enlarged and extended new way which connected to the main road line.One more visible change is that shop and fish market which

located

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are located

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the

westsouth

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west-south

west south

side

has

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been turned into

the

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restaurants and apartments respectively.

Additioanally

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Additionally

, the fishing port was demolished.

However

, the other facilities remain unchanged.The hotel and cafe to the southeast

side

stil

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still

stand and near

hotel

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the hotel

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was constructed new parking area.

Sat Feb 15 2020

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

133 words

5.50

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Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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the map below shows the changes that have been take place in a seaside area since 1995

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cell phone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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