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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the

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Rise in demand for the e-book is suppressing the use of
paper
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 books is a good move, but yet it is debatable.
This
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 essay will suggest moving sustainability lifestyle is the biggest advantage and how
power
Suggestion
the power
 of the vision gets affected is the primary disadvantage. Going paperless is
wisest decision
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the wisest decision
 towards helping us control
environment
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environmental
 issues. If electronic copy of
books
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the books
 is bought,
then
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 you are tackling
environment
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environmental
 problems in two ways.
Firstly
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, reduction in deforestation by
paper
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 manufacturing industry,
secondly
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, curb carbon emission by drastically cutting down transport required for the
paper
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. These small changes aid to solve
global warming problem
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the global warming problem
global warming problems
 because these trees hold ground water, build the required pressure needed for
rain fall
water falling in drops from vapor condensed in the atmosphere
rainfall
, provide shelter to wildlife and major maintain our eco-system. As per the factual data from
UN
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the UN
, unfortunately, for every single book is manufactured one giant tree is cut down and every year six million trees are chopped down. Continuous gazing at
screen
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the screen
a screen
 of an electronic gadget hampers eyesight. Generally, electronic devices emit harmful radiations
as a result
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, these radiations penetrate into
eye
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the eye
 which causes eye related problem. A recent survey by Cambridge University found that people who read books on their device tend to develop eye problems like decrease in the power of vision at
early age
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an early age
. On balance, people are stepping up to use
e-copy
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an e - copy
 of
book
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the book
a book
 over the
paper
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 book because it has
upper hand
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the upper hand
an upper hand
 to keep our planet green by curtailing trees cut down and significant limitation is that over the course of time one can develop poor vision.

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