Some people think that cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe that this is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

tourism
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Tourism
has been increased in a country at
high level
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a high level
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the
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The
main attraction of the
toursits
someone who travels for pleasure
tourists
is the
culture
of the particular place
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some
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Some
school of thoughts asserts that
cultural history
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the cultural history
of
particular place
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a particular place
particular places
is being destroyed by
toursits
someone who travels for pleasure
tourists
with aim of money
making whilw others
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while making others
making while others
believe that it is the only way to protect the
culture
from
extintion
no longer active; extinguished
extinction
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To
begin with the former statement that why some people claims that more
tourisim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
can destroy the cultural traditions
firstly
the
reason
behind
this
is that most of the
toursim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
destroy or misunderstands the
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the aggregate of past events
history
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of
particular nation
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a particular nation
particular nations
the particular nation
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marked by complexity and richness of detail
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most of the
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someone who visits
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destroys the important monuments and some time use a bad language
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being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
relates
to the
culture
of the tradition
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The
other
reason
that can be highlighted is
flow
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a flow
the flow
of westernization among youngsters
for
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example, many
vistors
someone who visits
visitors
are from
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
and the people of that particular nation get influenced
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by
the living style of
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someone who visits
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On
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the business of providing services to tourists
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reason
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start following it which help the youngsters

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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