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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: 1) Explain your situation 2) Describe your problems 3) Tell him/her when you think you can start. Write at least 150 words

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Many people believe that having a balanced
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 society finding time to have a balanced
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 a balanced
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 only will not make a person’s
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 healthy. There are other factors like exercising plays a major role in having a healthy
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 of unwanted calories in one’s body and make them feel more comfortable and fit. And
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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