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Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the
job
market we
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market, we
 can usually find two
kind
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kinds
 of
job
 options. One group of people like the full-time
woking
actively engaged in paid work
working
 option as it provides more
sustainablity
the property of being sustainable
sustainability
sustainable
. The
second
 group of people
think
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thinks
 that the liberty to work
pressurelessly
 is only possible with part-time jobs. From my point of view, full-time working facilities have more
benefites
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 than
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
counter part
a person or thing having the same function or characteristics as another
counterpart
. In todays world, the
sustainablity
the property of being sustainable
sustainability
 of the income source has more importance than ever before.
Expances
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Expenses
Expanses
Experiences
 of of our daily life
is increasing
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are increasing
 day by day, which makes maintaining our monthly budget very difficult. A full-time
jon
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
job
generaly
usually; as a rule
generally
general
 has more salary
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the part-time
job
.
This
 bigger wages
gives
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give
 us the space to expand our budget if
nessacery
absolutely essential
necessary
.
Accept space
.
 It
also
 helps us to ensure to have some savings for our uncertain future.
This
 full-time works
also
 have other advantages
such
 as pension, insurance support etc. Not only that, a full-time workers get more respect than the casual one in many
society
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societies
. Since a full-time
job
 offers a future security, the employees remain
mentaly
in your mind
mentally
mental
 calm. Have not casual jobs any significant
benefite
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
benefits
?
Athough
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Although
 full-time jobs seem more appealing, casual works have some positive side
also
. The
first
 and the most
noticable
capable or worthy of being perceived
noticeable
 one is the
liteness
a feeling of joy and pride
lightness
likeness
 of the work. Because of the low payments, part-time workers enjoy a very pressure free working environment. They
also
 get more freedom of mobility than any full-time employee. That being said, the facilities a part-time worker enjoy can never overwhelm the positive outcomes the full-time workers usually get. A full-time
job
 demands a huge amount of responsibility to a person. In return, it brings stability, financial comfort and a safer future.

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