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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

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The goals of participating in sports are numerous considering the satisfaction derived by the participants. Wining, being physically fit, bonding and so on are some of these goals and they appeal to the sports people differently. Whether football, tennis or swimming when competitive wining is a key obj
ective but if
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objective, but
 it is for recreational purposes the objective might change. I will present my opp
inion lo
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opinions
oking at reasons why a
game
 can be preferred when it is an individual
sport
 or as a
team
 spo
rts co
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sport
nsidering the objectives.
Firstly
, competitive sports individuals always want to be on the win
ing si
having won
winning
de.
For example
, a footballer like Lionel Messi will always want to win in any football
game
 and as
such
 he will rely on other
team
 members to execute the
game
 plan. The
game
's outcome will depend on the passion and drive of all the
team
 members whi
ch if no
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which, if
t optimal can lead to a loss. Alternatively an individual
sport
 man like a tennis player will depend on just his energy and tactics to decide the
game
.
Fur
ther more, r
in addition
Furthermore
elationships Between
team
 members or an individual athlete with his support crew
also
 determine the achievements.
For example
 a collaboration in a
team
 that takes out bad energy will result in goo
d pe
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better
rformance and vis
e ve
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vice
rsa. Most times teams have to resolve more conflicts to ensure they are at the top of their
game
,
also
 allow for fun while playing compared to an individual who is always alone and scarcely having conflicts with their supporting crew.
Finally
, a
team
sport
 or an individual
sport
 all have their advantages and disadvantages. An athlete may enjoy easy management of their out
come but ha
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outcome, but
ve more burden compared to a
team
 that may have ser
veral ma
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several
n
egerial is
of or relating to the function or responsibility or activity of management
managerial
sues to deal with. Whether competing or not, participants should have all the benefits that com
es wi
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come
th their individual and collective goals to ensure optimum satisfaction.
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