Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

Nowadays
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there are many courses available - music
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painting
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dancing
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singing - on the internet, in
specialize
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specialized
classes for the students, who ain't good enough to do their academic study and
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their
further
career in it. Meanwhile, some of are having a viewpoint that vocational courses are
waste
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a waste
of money and the authority must spend
this
money to facilitate other public services. A large extent
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I
do not agree with
this
statement and
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I
will provide appropriate reasons to take
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. There are many reasons that the government should support arts field.
Firstly
, in academic study, a lot of students only know that there are two
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kinds
of education,
such
as, science and
commerce but
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commerce, but
they do not know that they
also
can see their future in
arts field
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the arts field
. If they get
good result
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good results
a good result
, they will engage with
sience
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
stream and if they get
average result
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average results
an average result
, they will take commerce stream.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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