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Some people believ that it is important to give gifts to friends and Family to show that we care about them

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There is no doubt that there are many different ways to
show
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 to the people around us.
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, some people believe that giving gifts and presents is a better way to
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 our affection, while others think there are some affected methods to
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 our
love
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 for the people we care about. Many people believe that it is eventful to give gifts and presents to our friends and our family to
show
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 our tenderness.
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 because these gifts are enjoyment in substances, and some people feel affection by having material needs.
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, people who live oversea usually give furnishing and other expensive
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
 to
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 our
love
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 to our family members. The reason why they do
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 that since they live in different countries, gifts and presents are the easiest way to prove their
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.
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, some people think that there are many different ways other than giving gifts to
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love
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. In my opinion, go back once in a while to see your family, it's far more expressive to
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 your
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 for your family than those gifts.
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, expensive items are not always necessary to reveal the tenderness. The other methods,
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 as spending precious time with your close ones and taking care of them physically, all are
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 significant to our family. In conclusion, though gifts sometimes can see as a symbol to
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 our caring, especially in long-distance.
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, sharing time with friends and family and assisting them whenever they need help can
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 be a pleasing way to
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 our
love
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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