The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. 

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts provide information about UK
graduates
and
postgraduates
who are not
into
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in
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full-time
employment
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employees
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engaged in after graduating from college in the year 2008. At a glance, it is clearly visible that the majority of the
students
in both groups furthered their studies after leaving college, whilst
minority
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the minority
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went into voluntary work. A large number of
students
, both
graduates
and
postgraduates
, who did not get a full-time job furthered their education as soon as they left college. About 29,665
graduates
as against 2,725
postgraduates
pursued another qualification. Part-time work was
next
in line, and over 17,000
graduates
were involved compared to only 2,535
postgraduates
. As regards unemployment, 16,235 graduate
students
had no job
in contrast
to 1,625
postgraduates
who were not working as
at
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the year stated. A very small population of
students
in both categories decided to render voluntary services,
the
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number of
graduates
who toiled
this
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on this
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path
were
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was
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more than the postgraduate
students
. About 3,500
graduates
were recorded to be involved in voluntary work as opposed to only 345 postgraduate
students
.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, postgraduates, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution of activities
  • full-time employment
  • similar trends
  • significant proportion
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • unemployment
  • economic challenges
  • secure jobs
  • post-college activity
  • practical experience
  • additional education
  • volunteer work
  • personal development
  • skill enhancement
  • comparatively
  • niche skillsets
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