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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The form shows
the
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data about the underground railway
systems
 in different cities.
According to
 the table, the oldest underground railway system is opened in London and covers the longest
railways
.
On the other hand
, Los Angeles is the latest as it opened in 2001 and
also
 covers the
second
 least length of
railways
.
Furthermore
, most people are using the
railways
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railway's
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systems
 in Tokyo. There provides 1927
millions
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million
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 passengers per year.
Whereas
 in Kyoto, the
railways
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railway's
railways'
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systems
 provide the fewest number of passengers with 45
millions
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million
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 per year. These two cities
also
 have more than 100km gap in
length
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the length
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 of
route
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the route
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.
Although
 Tokyo
railways
systems
 are older than other
one
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, they are
using
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used
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 by users frequently.
Therefore
,
London
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the London
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railways
systems
 are the oldest and
also
are
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the longest length of
route
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the route
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 in these cities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words systems, railways with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • route length
  • passenger capacity
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport
  • technological advancements
  • economic contribution
  • industrial growth
  • population density
  • network expansion
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