Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that free social
activities
should be a mandatory part of high
school
programs.
While
students
who take part in these
activities
may face some unexpected issues, I agree that educators should design required
community
services
for their high
school
students
without any payments. On the one hand, the most considerable trouble
affects
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students
when participating in public
activities
is the shortage of time. Particularly, they may be less focused on their core lessons in class,
even
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and even
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lack leisure time because of spending too much time
for
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community
services
.
Besides
, there are obligatory
services
which do not suit
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everyone.
For example
, working for a charity
at
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mountainous places or suburban areas requires
students
to have to go far away or teaching sports to younger children at
outdoor
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an outdoor
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stadium
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demands
a
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good health. All of these types of work do not fit
to
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the weak girls or unhealthy
students
.
On the other hand
, attending unpaid public
services
will bring great benefits to high
school
students
.
Firstly
, these programs create a positive environment for
students
to be raised in a holistic way, not only improving their social knowledge but
also
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their perception
about
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the
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outdoor life.
This
is really an appropriate method to train them on how to work for the interest of
community
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instead
of living only for themselves.
Secondly
, taking part in public
activities
such
as volunteer campaigns and charity organizations is a highlighted point which makes their resume brilliant. If an applicant who has the same
qualification
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, as well as experiences with other candidates, would like to apply for a scholarship or a competitive job, his past
activities
for the interest of
community
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may make an outstanding contribution in helping him defeat the others. In conclusion,
although
there are some disadvantages, it seems to me that we should design more unpaid obligatory
community
programs for high
school
students
.

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