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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Medical and health
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 systems play an important role in every country and it
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 is one of the key features of that countries development ranking. It is expected that all creeds should provide cheap health services even though it may not be the most up to dated procedure and treatments due to its high price and expensiveness.
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 essay will discuss why all nations should give free services in any quality available despite the high price of it. Governments always claim that they provide a decent
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 system through their insurance policies. These policies are designed to cover the most common wellness issues which do not require a huge budget. As an example, in my country, if you need to cover some sophisticated diseases, you need to pay extra money in order to get supplementary goods. These issues make people worried about their future and make them feel that their coverage is unreliable. Despite the wrong policies which governments follow on their security programs, the idea of a complete and free of
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cost, care
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 affects the societies healthiness, but it pays off in many different ways for the nation. When people are in good shape, they work more proficiently so that there will be stronger economics. As a record, if an employer takes
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 of his employee's wellness conditions, it will surely have less overheads for him rather than replacing and training another professional in
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the long term
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 essay argued that countries should provide
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vigor
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 and medical services to its citizens even if
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 costly. In my opinion, expending on society's physical
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condition, not
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less, but
 it will redeem in long-run though it may not be the most recent medicaments and
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 governments should invest more in people’s well-being.
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