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Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #money #railways #roads
It is important to consider How
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
spend
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spends
 its money.
Although
 there are split opinions regarding
this
 practice. Where, certain group of people believes that they should invest on Railways
instead
 of Roadways. I tend to agree to
this
 statement with large extent. My position is argued
further
 with
explanation
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the explanation
. There are several views which
supports
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support
 a
develoopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developmental
 of
raliways
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railways
. Out of all the arguments, the foremost one is the
transportaion
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 service rail offers. It is the most reliable, Quick and cheap mode of
transportion
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 for all the citizens who commute daily to jobs and school.
In addition
, large
number
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numbers
 of
group
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groups
 can travel via railways.
As a result
, more
peolpe
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 would
inclined
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incline
 towards it and there will be
lesser number
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a lesser number
 of personal
vehicle
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vehicles
 on roads which would prove a vital solution to
overccome
win a victory over
overcome
 global warming too.
However
, I would not overlook the other side too, there are mainly two merits that
raodways
a road (especially that part of a road) over which vehicles travel
roadways
 offers.
Firstly
, nowadays, there are
more number
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number
 of cars on the road as
compard
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compared
 to in the past. If roads are better, it would help commutes to travel more comfortably so they would reach at their work on time.
Consequently
.
it
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It
 is important for any country which is progressing.
Also
, If roads are not in
good situation
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a good situation
, it would halt transportation that would prove detrimental for
business
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the business
.
Thus
, to conclude the discussion, it can be
finally
 said that cheaper cost
,
Accept space
,
 mass usage and
relabilty
the quality of being dependable or reliable
reliability
 of railways offers more
advatages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
advantageous
 than its drawbacks. In my opinion,
Goverment
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the Government
Government
 should give more priority to rails.
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