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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Since time immemorial, a
person
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's success has always been measured by the amount of
money
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 he has accumulated over the course of his life. In my opinion, there are some other characteristics that rightly define a human being as being successful apart from just
money
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. These can include the
person
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's virtues of helping the needy people and maintaining a sense of humility while being around all kinds of people. Whether a
person
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 is successful in every sense of the word or not, can be judged by his being considerate towards the poor and the needy. If a well-off individual can feed those in help, it can be very beneficial for them.
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, I have a paternal uncle who donates at least ten percent of his earnings to an NGO that feeds poor children on the streets.
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, a well established human must endeavour to help the poor people wherever possible. In
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a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
additions
 to that, a
person
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's success can be ascertained by the kind of humility he maintains when around other people from different backgrounds. A prosperous man always maintains the same level of dignity with all kinds of humans. To illustrate, a sports personality named Sachin Tendulkar, even after having earned enormous amounts of
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 and having received appreciation from people of all sorts, remains so down to earth till date.
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, it should
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 be a necessary quality for a famous
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 to have some modesty towards others. To sum up, only
money
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 should not be the criteria for a human
to be
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being
 successful and famous. One's good
deeds including
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deeds, including
 benevolence, modesty make one achieve the ultimate level of success.
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