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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, there are people who believe that the number of senior citizens is higher than young citizens in many nations in the future. From my point of view, it exerts negative impacts on countries’ development.
This
 essay will give some culprits that contribute to
this
 assertion. The main reason for not supporting
this
 phenomenon is because of the financial problems. Old people over the age of 65 are mostly unable to keep contributing to their countries’
economies
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economic
economy
economy's
economies'
 development due to their health issues.
Therefore
, they have to live
on
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with
for
 their children, and the social welfare under the form of pension.
As a result
, the increasingly high percentage of
aged
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age
aging
 inhabitants means heavier burden on the state budget. Another factor we should not forget is the resource respect. Aging population can
also
 be understood as the shrinking number of young
generation
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generations
 at working age. It is obvious that if the rate of senior workers is high, it poses a threat to youngster to have
employee
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employment
 opportunities.
Working environment lack
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The working environment, lack
The working environment lack
 of young resources might lead to economic stagnation.
However
, people say that old people have strong experience which can help younger generation solve problems
at
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in
 their workplace.
Moreover
, it is possible to say that they can support family by taking care their granddaughters, grandsons or cooking for their
family
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families
. In conclusion, in my opinion, I strongly believe that the higher proportion of
aged
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age
aging
 people poses a danger to nations’ promotion because of the financial problems and the younger
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 shortage at working environment.
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