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As air travel has become cheaper, more and more people are travelling abroad for their vacations instead of visiting places in their own country. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is generally acknowledged that travelling to different countries for vacation has become more and more popular as flight tickets are getting cheaper.
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, individuals visit local places less. While going abroad has several benefits, personally, I believe, they are both outnumbered and outweighed by the disadvantages.
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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 phenomenon followed by my personal point of view. On the one hand, travelling outside of the country
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 of visiting local places has numerous merits; chief among them, the fact that people can broaden their perspective due to seeing different cultures.
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 leads to having unique ideas resulting in being more productive in the workplace. As a consequence, companies, as well as the whole nation, can grow and develop faster.
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 has been evidenced by a number of academic studies the latest of which is one published by the University of Sydney in 2017 concluding that, 75 percent of travellers who prefer to go abroad have significantly different ideas to apply to their work, as they are able to see different perspectives while they are away. The study
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 shows that the companies which hire those employees contribute to the national growth more than others, as they get economically stronger with new ideas.
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, going abroad for a holiday rather than going to a location inside of the country has innumerable undeniable demerits, the latest of which is losing the cultural identity owing to the fact that individuals do not know their own culture. If they would spend their vacation in cities of their country, they would learn their own roots.
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 creates value for national identity resultıng in carrying the heritage. According to the latest statistics released by the Heritage Committee of Russia in 2018, 88% of the Russian population know American culture better
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 of their own, as they travel to the U.S a lot.
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, they are about to lose most of the local cultures
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 as making Matryoshka dolls, as no one visits those villages to learn. In conclusion, whereas having a vacation abroad due to cheaper flight tickets has several potential merits
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 as broaden individuals' perspective, they are undoubtedly eclipsed by the demerits which are losing the cultural heritage and not knowing their roots.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • destination countries
  • hospitality
  • cultural exchange
  • global understanding
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • sustainable development
  • local tourism
  • domestic tourists
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