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Some people think that big sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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Generally, the public thinks that major events focussing on sports are not worth the money and time spent by the
host
country
. I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe major sporting events bring
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of new opportunities for the
host
country
. Any
country
 which decides to
host
 a major sporting event can take advantage of
this
 platform to showcase its culture and many other popular and unique aspects of their people and businesses. The beginning and closing ceremony of a sporting event is a good opportunity for local artists and performers to present their shows.
This
 will give them a global reach which can result in more opportunities for local artists. Along with that major sporting events help boost revenue for various sports related businesses. Businesses can use advertising to present their services in front of a larger audience in various stadiums where the sports are conducted. Many businesses related to hotels and airlines will be able to see higher revenue during the sporting events
thus
 boosting business during the sporting season. Of course, the
country
 will have to invest in organizing and collaborating with local sports bodies, media and security to conduct big sporting events. In spite of
this
 I strongly believe that sporting events are worth the investment in terms of money, time and people power and will benefit the
host
country
 vastly.
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